Tip #1
Wrangling Tenses
Print out your manuscript and get 3 contrasting highlighters, eg, pink, yellow, and blue.
Now go through your manuscript and highlight all your past tenses together with one color. Then do the same with each of your remaining tenses so that it’s clear where you are switching tenses. Finally, especially with younger age stories, pick a tense and do your best to stick with it. Of course there may be parts where you need to change tenses, but this will help you be very mindful of where you are doing it and whether it's needed.
Here’s a fun joke: The Past and the Future walked into a bar. Things were pretty tense.
Tip #2
Need some sparkle in your story?
If your story is a little lackluster - make or use some metaphors or similes. A metaphor or simile can add poetry or it can add humor. Metaphors are when you put two dissimilar things together to evoke an emotion or provide a poetic description. “Melanie looked out at a sea of smiles.”
A simile is a type of metaphor, but where you use the word “like” or “as” as in my soon to come example.
I’m currently in the final stages of putting together what’s shaping up to be another truly groundbreaking course. This one is an inspirational craft course on writing funny books for kids or infusing humor into existing stories. I cannot tell you how many times I’ve laughed out loud, but in the section on metaphors and similes, that also incorporates the element of surprise, I added this little simile example, “Melanie’s face was like the sun. [page turn]. It was big and round and hot and yellow. Oh no! What was wrong with Melanie?”
If you are interested in exploring metaphors and similes, here are some cool resources.
https://literarydevices.net/a-huge-list-of-short-metaphor-examples/
http://www.macmillandictionaryblog.com/a-list-of-metaphors
And some great similes
http://www.writers-free-reference.com/100bestsimile.htm
http://examples.yourdictionary.com/simile-examples-for-kids.html
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